Wednesday, August 31, 2016
Tuesday, August 30, 2016
Impressions: A Writer's Travel Recap
I could bore you with a replay of my week's vacation, what we saw and what we did. That might be usefull for me, especially years from now when I struggle to catch those elusive bits of memory.
But that's why I had multiple Facebook check-ins, to be reminded of them through Facebook memories next year, when I could momentarily pause in my morning power walk, and say, "Ah, yes," smile, and keep walking, literally and figuratively.
But the real treasure of this vacation, and really any vacation or experience for me, I suppose, a revelation more realized after this trip, are the impressions. These are the parts that made the entire experience rich, the images that will linger in my psyche and provide fodder for my writerly projects.
While I didn't snap one selfie, I did take photos and videos of moments that resonated with me. It's these that I'll share in the days and weeks to come.
Monday, August 29, 2016
"A Dream Within a Dream" Edgar Allan Poe
"A Dream Within A Dream" (1849)
By Edgar Allan Poe
Take this kiss upon the brow!
And, in parting from you now,
Thus much let me avow-
You are not wrong, who deem
That my days have been a dream;
Yet if hope has flown away
In a night, or in a day,
In a vision, or in none,
Is it therefore the less gone?
All that we see or seem
Is but a dream within a dream.
I stand amid the roar
Of a surf-tormented shore,
And I hold within my hand
Grains of the golden sand-
How few! yet how they creep
Through my fingers to the deep,
While I weep- while I weep!
O God! can I not grasp
Them with a tighter clasp?
O God! can I not save
One from the pitiless wave?
Is all that we see or seem
Sunday, August 28, 2016
I'm Back
Remember what I said about blog posts being spotty while I was in Raleigh? Definitely an understatement. They, along with most social media postings, disappeared all together for one good reason: no time.
It was a very relaxing and productive vacation, and I'll share the details of both over the next few days.
Relaxing because I spent time away simply enjoying my family and doing the things they want to do without the the daily routine calling my name.
Productive because we also wrapped up a couple of lingering projects.
I was happy to leave. I'm happy to be back.
And now to tame the email monster...
Friday, August 19, 2016
Story Round-Up: Features in The Herald-News, Aug. 14 through Aug. 19
Been a week a scrambling to get ready to leave for Raleigh today. Even missed WriteOn Joliet last night. Have to leave shortly, so...
Check out the health, faith, and arts and entertainment calendars. Three of them can be found at the link below. http://www.theherald-news.com/lifestyle/ Gotta Do It, runs each Sunday and often stays on the home page throughout the week.
Feature briefs for Tuesday (health), Thursday (faith), Friday (Arts and Entertainment), and Sunday (People) are also edited (texted and photos) by the lady of this blog, but only the stories have bylines.
Another option: I do post the briefs and calendars on Twitter during the week, so you're welcome to follow me at @Denise_Unland61.
And if you do peek at these stories, to quote our editor Kate Schott, "Thank you for reading The Herald-News." :)
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/04/joliet-woman-begins-foundation-in-memory-of-her-husband/a1jmlh1/
An Extraordinary Life: Shorewood man forged lasting connections through love of sports
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/13/an-extraordinary-life-shorewood-man-forged-lasting-connections-through-love-of-sports/ah3svra/
Pets of the Week: Aug. 15
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/11/pets-of-the-week-aug-15/a4i9fk6/
State-licensed medical marijuana dispensary in Romeoville to host Aug. 20 informational event
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/11/state-licensed-medical-marijuana-dispensary-in-romeoville-to-host-aug-20-informational-event/avlq6a4/
Joliet woman prepares to consecrate herself to God (VIDEO EXTRA)
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/17/joliet-woman-prepares-to-consecrate-herself-to-god/a3ump0q/
Joliet senior spent 5 days in the wilderness climbing mountains (VIDEO EXTRA)
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/16/joliet-senior-spent-5-days-in-the-wilderness-climbing-mountains/a5jb3oe/
Check out the health, faith, and arts and entertainment calendars. Three of them can be found at the link below. http://www.theherald-news.com/lifestyle/ Gotta Do It, runs each Sunday and often stays on the home page throughout the week.
Feature briefs for Tuesday (health), Thursday (faith), Friday (Arts and Entertainment), and Sunday (People) are also edited (texted and photos) by the lady of this blog, but only the stories have bylines.
Another option: I do post the briefs and calendars on Twitter during the week, so you're welcome to follow me at @Denise_Unland61.
And if you do peek at these stories, to quote our editor Kate Schott, "Thank you for reading The Herald-News." :)
Joliet woman begins foundation in memory of her husband
Former Joliet police officer’s compassion lives on through
foundation in his name
“Making a difference in people’s lives
was what Joe was all about,” Sandy Gerrettie, Joe's wife, said. “That’s why he wanted to be a
cop.”
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/04/joliet-woman-begins-foundation-in-memory-of-her-husband/a1jmlh1/
An Extraordinary Life: Shorewood man forged lasting connections through love of sports
Baseball fan pitched a good game of life
“He liked the uniforms, the rules, the
sportsmanship. It’s just very orderly,” Rheta Murdaugh, Bob Shoop's girlfriend said. “And he liked the
competition.”
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/13/an-extraordinary-life-shorewood-man-forged-lasting-connections-through-love-of-sports/ah3svra/
Pets of the Week: Aug. 15
Click on the caption of each photo to
find out about that pet, including where he or she can be adopted.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/11/pets-of-the-week-aug-15/a4i9fk6/
State-licensed medical marijuana dispensary in Romeoville to host Aug. 20 informational event
Midwest Compassion educates the public
on facts about medical marijuana
Many people are surprised to learn that
medical marijuana is available in products that don’t require smoking and don’t
sedate the user, which is important for active patients and those caring for
children, Nicole van Rensburg, co-operator, said.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/11/state-licensed-medical-marijuana-dispensary-in-romeoville-to-host-aug-20-informational-event/avlq6a4/
Joliet woman prepares to consecrate herself to God
Claire Halbur plans to live in the world
but not of the world
Halbur is preparing to become a
consecrated virgin, a decision she said “resonates deeply in her heart and in
her soul.”
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/17/joliet-woman-prepares-to-consecrate-herself-to-god/a3ump0q/
Joliet senior spent 5 days in the wilderness climbing mountains
Cheri Johnson pushed herself on an epic
hike and prevailed
Cheri Johnson, 63, executive assistant to Will
County State’s Attorney James Glasgow, said she spent five days hiking 8 to 15
miles a day up mountains – sometimes rising at 2:30 a.m. to do so – and scrambling
over loose rocks.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/16/joliet-senior-spent-5-days-in-the-wilderness-climbing-mountains/a5jb3oe/
Thursday, August 18, 2016
BryonySeries Throwback Thursday: We Have a Mansion!
Wednesday, March 23, 2011
We Have a Mansion!
Pat and Andrea Magosky, owners of the P. Seth Magosky Museum of Victorian Life in Joliet, Illinois, are "loaning" us the mansion for filming purposes. Stephen Tuplin has already shot some initial footage and plans to use the location for the Bryony trailer, interviews with theBryony team, and the Bryony music video. The museum even has a grand piano! Bryony web administrator Sarah Stegall will be in town this weekend for the Big Brothers Big Sisters Bowl for Kids Sake, so she will be the first person interviewed and photographed on location. Lucky! I'll share more about the P. Seth Magosky Museum of Victorian Life in future posts. For now, a brief history and some photographs can be seen here:http://www.cityofjoliet.com/business/museum.htm
Wednesday, August 17, 2016
Raleigh Bound!
On Friday afternoon, Rebekah and I fly out to North Caroline to spend a week with Sarah and her family.
To prepare, I am attempting to get nearly and extra week's worth of work done (which will run the week I am gone), and Rebekah has graciously picked up my portion of the household duties to fee up some of my time. She also is the travel coordinator and suitcase packer. I literally will only have to get in the car when it's time to leave.
What will we do out there? Who knows? Last year, I had two goals: to read through my BryonySeries as a series and to do whatever Sarah and Lucas (my grandson) wanted to do. We didn't make it through Sarah's list last year, so she started another before we left. I assume we'll just pick up where we left off.
One change from last year: Bertrand the Mouse will accompany us wherever we go. We plan to take lots of pictures of him so we can finally get some books released.
So really, this year's goals look like last year's goals. Posting may be spotty next week, but we'll see.
Have a great day. :)
To prepare, I am attempting to get nearly and extra week's worth of work done (which will run the week I am gone), and Rebekah has graciously picked up my portion of the household duties to fee up some of my time. She also is the travel coordinator and suitcase packer. I literally will only have to get in the car when it's time to leave.
What will we do out there? Who knows? Last year, I had two goals: to read through my BryonySeries as a series and to do whatever Sarah and Lucas (my grandson) wanted to do. We didn't make it through Sarah's list last year, so she started another before we left. I assume we'll just pick up where we left off.
One change from last year: Bertrand the Mouse will accompany us wherever we go. We plan to take lots of pictures of him so we can finally get some books released.
So really, this year's goals look like last year's goals. Posting may be spotty next week, but we'll see.
Have a great day. :)
Tuesday, August 16, 2016
Improve Productivity With Dedicated Time
But I don't have time!
It's a common refrain (reason, excuse) why people don't do the things they claim they want to do. But the truth is,we all have the same amount of time each day,week, month, year, and that time passes us by with shocking speed, and we never accomplish our dreams.
What many of us do have are very full days. Those full days are like full closets. If we wish to add more, something has to go.
If our days are too full to write, and we really want to write (some people only think they want to write), then something must go.
In my case, it was clearning thirty minutes of my morning to work on my novel.
I'm the type of person that has the mindset of "work before play." Except that I never completed all the work I wanted to do before I'd allow myself the pleasure of playing with the novel. Or if I did, then I was too tired to be creative. Over time, I grew frustrated and resentful, leading to less productivity. So I made space at the beginning of the day. How? I cut the work off earlier, got my ass to bed earlier, and woke up earlier. I did this about nine months ago, and I'm happy I did.
Thirty minutes doesn't seem like much time,and I wish I could grow it to an hour (my original goal). But even thirty minutes is extremely helpful.
It means when I have great chunks of time on Saturday, I can let ideas spill onto the page. It means I don't have to stop to refine, research, or slow the space to develop a character, describe a scene, etc. and watch the precious minutes of a writing Saturday tick by. When I come to one of those places, I type a few words about the work that section needs, bold it, add it to my "homework" file, and keep going.
In those dedicated thirty minutes, I pick one of those items.
My way may not be your way. But if you really want to write, find a way. You'll be glad you did.
It's a common refrain (reason, excuse) why people don't do the things they claim they want to do. But the truth is,we all have the same amount of time each day,week, month, year, and that time passes us by with shocking speed, and we never accomplish our dreams.
What many of us do have are very full days. Those full days are like full closets. If we wish to add more, something has to go.
If our days are too full to write, and we really want to write (some people only think they want to write), then something must go.
In my case, it was clearning thirty minutes of my morning to work on my novel.
I'm the type of person that has the mindset of "work before play." Except that I never completed all the work I wanted to do before I'd allow myself the pleasure of playing with the novel. Or if I did, then I was too tired to be creative. Over time, I grew frustrated and resentful, leading to less productivity. So I made space at the beginning of the day. How? I cut the work off earlier, got my ass to bed earlier, and woke up earlier. I did this about nine months ago, and I'm happy I did.
Thirty minutes doesn't seem like much time,and I wish I could grow it to an hour (my original goal). But even thirty minutes is extremely helpful.
It means when I have great chunks of time on Saturday, I can let ideas spill onto the page. It means I don't have to stop to refine, research, or slow the space to develop a character, describe a scene, etc. and watch the precious minutes of a writing Saturday tick by. When I come to one of those places, I type a few words about the work that section needs, bold it, add it to my "homework" file, and keep going.
In those dedicated thirty minutes, I pick one of those items.
My way may not be your way. But if you really want to write, find a way. You'll be glad you did.
Monday, August 15, 2016
Finally! An Update From Munsonville
So what's new?
The BryonySeries is (FINALLY!) available in various eBook formats as well as print.
All four books (Bryony, Visage, Staked! and Memories in the Kitchen: Bites and Nibbles from Bryony) are available in Kindle and Nook.
Everything except the cookbook is also available on Smashwords.
Prefer print? Order here.
The BryonySeries Twitter, which has limped along, is now taking shape. Come follow the series!
Is that all? No! As we complete projects, such as cleaning up the website, I'll update.
And if you're hungry, Sue's Diner has a new recipe. :)
The BryonySeries is (FINALLY!) available in various eBook formats as well as print.
All four books (Bryony, Visage, Staked! and Memories in the Kitchen: Bites and Nibbles from Bryony) are available in Kindle and Nook.
Everything except the cookbook is also available on Smashwords.
Prefer print? Order here.
The BryonySeries Twitter, which has limped along, is now taking shape. Come follow the series!
Is that all? No! As we complete projects, such as cleaning up the website, I'll update.
And if you're hungry, Sue's Diner has a new recipe. :)
Sunday, August 14, 2016
Before Bread Machines and Active Dry Yeast
Bread-making in the
nineteenth century was very similar to modern, home bread-making with one
exception. The cooks at Simons
Mansion had to make their
own yeast.
From Miss Beecher’s
domestic receiptbook: designed as a supplement to her Treatise on domestic
economy.
4 quarts water
2 handfuls hops
8 peeled potatoes
Batter
1/3 Indian meal (cornmeal)
2/3 rye meal
1 pint cold water
1 tea cup molasses
1 tablespoon ginger
1 teacup distillery yeast
Boil hops and potatoes until soft. Mix and strain through a
sieve. Make a batter of the meals and cold water; amount of meal may vary, but
keep proportions correct; boil for 10 minutes. When cool as new milk, add
remaining ingredients.
From "Memories in the Kitchen: Bites and Nibbles From
'Bryony'"
All proceeds benefit Big Brothers Big Sisters of Will and Grundy
Counties. www.bbbswillgrundy.org.
Order the cookbook at www.bryonyseries.com/Dalton_s_Dry_Goods.html.
Saturday, August 13, 2016
Friday, August 12, 2016
Story Round-Up: Features in The Herald-News, Aug. 7 through Aug. 12
Did anyone else's week fly past?
And if I thought this past week sped by, listen to my schedule for today: meetings/interviews (all-in-person) at 9:45, 10:30, 11, noon, 1:30, 3 and then teaching tonight at 6:30. Oh, and I'm also the weekend editor with two appointments tomorrow and a story for Monday that needs writing and submitting.
WHEW!
But I still plan to spend one dedicated hour to Before the Blood. That's reasonable, don't you agree?
And now for something completely real.
Check out the health, faith, and arts and entertainment calendars. Three of them can be found at the link below. http://www.theherald-news.com/lifestyle/ Gotta Do It, runs each Sunday and often stays on the home page throughout the week.
Feature briefs for Tuesday (health), Thursday (faith), Friday (Arts and Entertainment), and Sunday (People) are also edited (texted and photos) by the lady of this blog, but only the stories have bylines.
Another option: I do post the briefs and calendars on Twitter during the week, so you're welcome to follow me at @Denise_Unland61.
And if you do peek at these stories, to quote our editor Kate Schott, "Thank you for reading The Herald-News." :)
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/04/joliet-foster-mom-brightens-lives-of-kids-not-in-her-care/a2qcytt/
Joliet woman grew the love in her family (VIDEO EXTRA)
As a baby, Angie was giggly and lovable, two traits intact even after the strokes affected Angie’s ability to think, talk and reason as she had in the past.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/05/joliet-woman-grew-the-love-in-her-family/a6tsnd7/
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/10/plainfield-catholic-school-has-its-first-campus-minister-in-crest-hill-resident/atahuv3/
And if I thought this past week sped by, listen to my schedule for today: meetings/interviews (all-in-person) at 9:45, 10:30, 11, noon, 1:30, 3 and then teaching tonight at 6:30. Oh, and I'm also the weekend editor with two appointments tomorrow and a story for Monday that needs writing and submitting.
WHEW!
But I still plan to spend one dedicated hour to Before the Blood. That's reasonable, don't you agree?
And now for something completely real.
Check out the health, faith, and arts and entertainment calendars. Three of them can be found at the link below. http://www.theherald-news.com/lifestyle/ Gotta Do It, runs each Sunday and often stays on the home page throughout the week.
Feature briefs for Tuesday (health), Thursday (faith), Friday (Arts and Entertainment), and Sunday (People) are also edited (texted and photos) by the lady of this blog, but only the stories have bylines.
Another option: I do post the briefs and calendars on Twitter during the week, so you're welcome to follow me at @Denise_Unland61.
And if you do peek at these stories, to quote our editor Kate Schott, "Thank you for reading The Herald-News." :)
Joliet foster mom brightens lives of kids not in her care (VIDEO EXTRA)
Janet Palkon’s Project Me provides supplies for kids in need
The Joliet woman collects suitcases and
backpacks, which she fills with personal care supplies and small games
for kids entering the foster care system.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/04/joliet-foster-mom-brightens-lives-of-kids-not-in-her-care/a2qcytt/
Joliet woman grew the love in her family
Angie Sanchez embraced life with openness
As a baby, Angie was giggly and lovable, two traits intact even after the strokes affected Angie’s ability to think, talk and reason as she had in the past.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/05/joliet-woman-grew-the-love-in-her-family/a6tsnd7/
Pets of the Week: Aug. 8
Click on the caption of each photo to find out about that
pet, including where he or she can be adopted.
Plainfield Catholic school has its first campus minister in
Crest Hill resident
Crest Hill man is St. Mary Immaculate Parish School’s first
campus minister
“I think it’s extremely important, especially in today’s
society, for students to see a young person strong in his faith, implementing
it and living out what the Gospels are telling us or Pope Francis is saying in
his weekly homilies,” Christopher Hueg said.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/10/plainfield-catholic-school-has-its-first-campus-minister-in-crest-hill-resident/atahuv3/
Joliet preschooler is winning pageant titles (VIDEO EXTRA)
Joliet couple feels pageant competitions can help develop
character
“She’s not going to get special treatment because she’s
queen,” her mother Lucia Williams said. “I try to teach her that the purpose of the crown
is not to be all ‘high and mighty,’ but to be kind and help others. Eventually,
we’d like to help her find a platform she can focus on.”
Thursday, August 11, 2016
BryonySeries Throwback Thursday: Sarah Stegall and the Magic of Bryony
Sunday, April 3, 2011
Sarah Stegall and the Magic of Bryony
My cell phone rings, and there's a chorus of groans.
"Betcha it's Sarah," one disgruntled adult child says. It doesn't matter which adult child. They've ALL said it. Nary a day passes when Sarah and I don't speak at least once, and one time is on the low side.
That wasn't the case a year ago.
Sarah is my oldest daughter. She lives out of state, but she could have lived on Pluto for all we communicated, mostly by email, even if she had lived next door. Things had been tense at best since her teen years, although we had progressed to some polite, if not friendly, communication.
Then, after the first round of editing, my niece asked to read Bryony. Except for four members of my household, no one else had read it or expressed a remote interest in reading it.
That got the proverbial ball rolling.
My niece loved it and begged her mother, my sister, to read it. My sister told me yesterday she had resisted, certain the story wouldn't be very good. But she read it, to please her daughter and loved it, so much that my parents wanted a copy. They, too, loved it, and my mother said so to Sarah.
That's when my daughter called and wanted to know why I hadn't let her read it. I told her she might, if she liked.
Sarah later told me she only wanted to read it so she could publically and harshly denigrate it. Hoiwever, I already knew that, which is why I couldn't box up a copy and send it out to her fast enough. Bryony was about to face her greatest critic.
A couple days later I received a Facebook message from Sarah: "Where are the other two drafts?" That was all, but she was in, "sucked in," she likes to say. Well, it is a vampire story. It was also a peaceful truce to years of conflict.
Since then, Sarah has created and maintained Bryony's Facebook page and website, helped with the cookbook, and has been the book's biggest champion and promotor. No one, including the author, has more enthusiasm for the story. Sarah has read Bryony cover to cover more than anybody and intends to keep that record, even after the book's release.
I like to think her reaction is a testimony to a good story. Sarah says she'd hate to seeBryony take off and miss her chance at being rich and famous. Hmmm....
"Betcha it's Sarah," one disgruntled adult child says. It doesn't matter which adult child. They've ALL said it. Nary a day passes when Sarah and I don't speak at least once, and one time is on the low side.
That wasn't the case a year ago.
Sarah is my oldest daughter. She lives out of state, but she could have lived on Pluto for all we communicated, mostly by email, even if she had lived next door. Things had been tense at best since her teen years, although we had progressed to some polite, if not friendly, communication.
Then, after the first round of editing, my niece asked to read Bryony. Except for four members of my household, no one else had read it or expressed a remote interest in reading it.
That got the proverbial ball rolling.
My niece loved it and begged her mother, my sister, to read it. My sister told me yesterday she had resisted, certain the story wouldn't be very good. But she read it, to please her daughter and loved it, so much that my parents wanted a copy. They, too, loved it, and my mother said so to Sarah.
That's when my daughter called and wanted to know why I hadn't let her read it. I told her she might, if she liked.
Sarah later told me she only wanted to read it so she could publically and harshly denigrate it. Hoiwever, I already knew that, which is why I couldn't box up a copy and send it out to her fast enough. Bryony was about to face her greatest critic.
A couple days later I received a Facebook message from Sarah: "Where are the other two drafts?" That was all, but she was in, "sucked in," she likes to say. Well, it is a vampire story. It was also a peaceful truce to years of conflict.
Since then, Sarah has created and maintained Bryony's Facebook page and website, helped with the cookbook, and has been the book's biggest champion and promotor. No one, including the author, has more enthusiasm for the story. Sarah has read Bryony cover to cover more than anybody and intends to keep that record, even after the book's release.
I like to think her reaction is a testimony to a good story. Sarah says she'd hate to seeBryony take off and miss her chance at being rich and famous. Hmmm....
Posted by Denise M. Baran-Unland at 3:12 AM
Wednesday, August 10, 2016
Tuesday, August 9, 2016
Ramp Up Tension
Has the interest thread on your novel slackened? Does your novel suffer from "middle age syndrome" by sagging in the middle? Here's a few tips for tightening it.
1) Beat the Clock: Add a challenge with an expiration date.
2) Betrayal: a friend becomes a foe.
3) Danger: Introduce elements that put characters at risk of harm.
3) Flashbacks: Memories that add snippets of knowledge crucial to a better understanding of the character and his past that will also impact his present and/or future.
4) Foreshadowing: Throw out shadows of approaching trouble.
5) Frustrate the Goal: Keep it out of your character's reach.
8) Rivalry: Have two characters bid for the same prize.
10) Subtext: Implication adds mystery and draws the reader in.
11) The Unknown: Keep your character (and your readers) guessing.
12) Villains: Add one or more to challenge your character and give him something to fight against, even if the villain is simply the "man in the mirror."
1) Beat the Clock: Add a challenge with an expiration date.
2) Betrayal: a friend becomes a foe.
3) Danger: Introduce elements that put characters at risk of harm.
3) Flashbacks: Memories that add snippets of knowledge crucial to a better understanding of the character and his past that will also impact his present and/or future.
4) Foreshadowing: Throw out shadows of approaching trouble.
5) Frustrate the Goal: Keep it out of your character's reach.
6) Raise the Bar/Stakes/Personal Involvement: The more bigger the goal, the harder your character will try to attain it, and the more readers will root for him.
7) Revelation: New information or comprehension that changes a character's or plot's course.
8) Rivalry: Have two characters bid for the same prize.
9) Threaten a Loved One: And make your character fight to save him.
10) Subtext: Implication adds mystery and draws the reader in.
11) The Unknown: Keep your character (and your readers) guessing.
12) Villains: Add one or more to challenge your character and give him something to fight against, even if the villain is simply the "man in the mirror."
Monday, August 8, 2016
Gone Are The Days...
...when I used to bang out thousands of words in a developing novel in a single weekend.
Or at least this is true for a good chunk of Before the Blood.
The world building and character development is so finely detailed and complex, it's impossible to compose at a rapid pace. Also, I now possess fairly decent self-editing skills, so I tend to edit as I write, which also slows the process.
On Saturday, I clocked just under 1,000 edited words. This was a section of Henry's sixth chapter that had given me trouble. Yet when I reread the passages on Sunday and was pleased with the results, I was still a tad frustrated at the length of time I needed to produce it.
Maybe novel writing has its seasons, too.
Or at least this is true for a good chunk of Before the Blood.
The world building and character development is so finely detailed and complex, it's impossible to compose at a rapid pace. Also, I now possess fairly decent self-editing skills, so I tend to edit as I write, which also slows the process.
On Saturday, I clocked just under 1,000 edited words. This was a section of Henry's sixth chapter that had given me trouble. Yet when I reread the passages on Sunday and was pleased with the results, I was still a tad frustrated at the length of time I needed to produce it.
Maybe novel writing has its seasons, too.
Sunday, August 7, 2016
Strawberry Ice Cream
Ice cream was John
Simons’ one, particular culinary weakness. Each lunch at Simons Mansion
ended with a dish of it.
Strawberry Ice Cream
Adapted from Miss
Beecher’s domestic receiptbook: designed as a supplement to her Treatise on
domestic economy.
1 pint ripe strawberries
1 pint cream
4 ounces powered sugar
Rub strawberries through a sieve, add cream, then sugar.
Freeze.
From "Memories in the Kitchen: Bites and Nibbles From
'Bryony'"
All proceeds benefit Big Brothers Big Sisters of Will and Grundy
Counties. www.bbbswillgrundy.org.
Order the cookbook at www.bryonyseries.com/Dalton_s_Dry_Goods.html.
Saturday, August 6, 2016
Steward Setback Saturday: Someone Finally Asked It
Monday, September 13,
2010
Someone Finally Asked
It
Bryony's basic
storyline was outlined decades ago, so I find it interesting when certain
elements mirror life today. For instance, from the very beginning, Melissa's
mother, Darlene, was a single parent, who supported Melissa and her younger
brother Brian through freelance writing assignments.
Someone asked me the
other day if I modeled Darlene's character on me. I denied it, and that was the
truth. At the time of the novel's conception, I was married with two small
children and a third on the way. The possiblity of raising those children (and
the three that followed them) as a single parent was the farthest thing from my
mind. Heck, I had never given freelance writing a thought. I'm not sure I even
knew thet option existed.
Besides, since I
married my first husband rather young (two weeks after my twentieth birthday),
my work history was slim: babysitting, office work, one fast food restaurant,
and a summer internship at a newspaper. I was a happy stay-at-home mom and had
no desire of ever being anything else.
However, since Darlene
cared for her husband Frank before his death and later raised two children in
the middle of Simons Woods, I wanted some lucrative work-at-home employment for
her. At the time I began the story--1985--the only jobs I knew that could be
performed at home were envelope stuffing and writing.
It seemed more likely
that Frank, a former photojournalist, would fall love with Darlene the writer
rather than Darlene the envelope stuffer. Also, having Munsonville's village
board hire Darlene to create promotional literature for Simons Mansion gave her
a good reason to relocate the family. I was well into the second round of edits
before it occured to me that someone might think I modeled Darlene after
myself.
Actually, I am none of
the characters. All but one spring completely from my imagination. Only Ed
Calkins is based on a real person and his imagination, brought to literary
life, with his permission, by my imagination. I've heard sometimes authors base
charcters on themselves, but for me, creating them only from the impressions
that roll about my mind has been much more fun.
Denise M. Baran-Unland at 7:27 AM
Friday, August 5, 2016
Story Round-Up: Features in The Herald-News, July 31 through Aug. 5
Workwise, I had a productive week. Novelwise, I had a productive weekend, which flowed into my 30-minute dedicated space in the work week. I look foward to building on it.
I'm still in chapter six of Henry's story, but now that the chapter has real shape, I was able to make a set of homework notes for the rest of it. I doubt I'll finish it before the month is up, but I think I will be close.
And now, back to the "real" writing.
Check out the health, faith, and arts and entertainment calendars. Three of them can be found at the link below. http://www.theherald-news.com/lifestyle/ Gotta Do It, runs each Sunday and often stays on the home page throughout the week.
Feature briefs for Tuesday (health), Thursday (faith), Friday (Arts and Entertainment), and Sunday (People) are also edited (texted and photos) by the lady of this blog, but only the stories have bylines.
Another option: I do post the briefs and calendars on Twitter during the week, so you're welcome to follow me at @Denise_Unland61.
And if you do peek at these stories, to quote our editor Kate Schott, "Thank you for reading The Herald-News." :)
New Lenox paleontologist creating 3-D maps of historic Jurassic site
New Lenox man part of research team at Cleveland-Lloyd
Dinosaur Quarry in Utah
Steve Clawson is mapping the site of
every bone the team finds – how far below the surface it is and its plunge
direction both horizontally and vertically, he said.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/07/26/new-lenox-paleontologist-creating-3-d-maps-of-historic-jurassic-site/ax6svfi/
An Extraordinary Life: New Lenox man was content and
grateful, always
Bill Johnson was upbeat and devoted to family and nature
His wife Pam hopes whoever received Bill’s sky-blue eyes – the only
organs able to be donated, she said – will see life through his perspective: no
fear of the future and a strong belief in the inherent goodness of people, the
sanctity of nature and the power of humor.
Pets of the Week: Aug. 1
Click on the caption of each photo to find out about that
pet, including where he or she can be adopted.
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/07/28/pets-of-the-week-aug-1/ad0jtsi/
EMS/trauma nurse coordinator at Joliet medical center is
committed to child safety
Presence Saint Joseph nurse honored for her dedication to
pediatric care
“Our children are so important to us,” said Leslie Livett of
Mokena, “and sometimes they don’t get the attention they need.”
Icon at Homer Glen church still producing fragrant oil 1
year later
People reporting blessings, healing at Assumption Greek
Orthodox Church
“I’m very thankful where I am today,” Ronald Koziol said. “I am
convinced that St. John definitely helped me, if not 100 percent cured me.
There is no doubt in my mind.”
http://www.theherald-news.com/2016/08/03/icon-at-homer-glen-church-still-producing-fragrant-oil-1-year-later/al45y7s/
Joliet actor's work to be featured in film festival at Gene
Siskel Film Center
22nd annual Black Harvest Film Festival includes film
starring Joliet man
The film is just 15 minutes long, has a cast of two people and was shot in one location, Lawrence Johnson Jr. said. But it’s effective and hilarious.
Thursday, August 4, 2016
BryonySeries Throwback Thursday: The First Cut is the Hardest
Monday, August 23, 2010
The First Cut is the Hardest
I’m not certain when the first round of edits arrived, since we don’t use the front door much in the winter. One of the kids had opened it on a Saturday afternoon in January and there was my manuscript, packaged and propped against the door.
A list of suggestions accompanied the copyediting. To my relief, those suggestions did not include deletions or plot changes, nothing that drastic. I focused on the mistakes. My husband Ron saw only the positive comments, especially, “A series would sell.” I couldn’t wait to get to work.
The editor wanted to deeper character development in two supporting characters. I was also instructed to deepen scene descriptions (I had focused more on action), use longer sentences, and to eliminate “wordiness” (a general, persistent fault of mine).
Then, an interesting thing happened. I had spent months learning to tell a story in novel form and even more months perfecting it. When I sat down to make my first, official change, I felt like a surgeon operating for the first time, except that I was also the patient. That first slice into my manuscript was the most painful. The rest were substantially easier.
The biggest error I made throughout the manuscript was style confusion (AP vs. MLA) and it was HUGE. The second, not as pervasive, but very embarrassing, was that some of my carefully set page breaks had moved.
It took eight weeks of daily work before Bryony was ready for its second send-off. I set it aside for several days and scrolled through it. I found copy errors and straying page breaks. I cracked.
A list of suggestions accompanied the copyediting. To my relief, those suggestions did not include deletions or plot changes, nothing that drastic. I focused on the mistakes. My husband Ron saw only the positive comments, especially, “A series would sell.” I couldn’t wait to get to work.
The editor wanted to deeper character development in two supporting characters. I was also instructed to deepen scene descriptions (I had focused more on action), use longer sentences, and to eliminate “wordiness” (a general, persistent fault of mine).
Then, an interesting thing happened. I had spent months learning to tell a story in novel form and even more months perfecting it. When I sat down to make my first, official change, I felt like a surgeon operating for the first time, except that I was also the patient. That first slice into my manuscript was the most painful. The rest were substantially easier.
The biggest error I made throughout the manuscript was style confusion (AP vs. MLA) and it was HUGE. The second, not as pervasive, but very embarrassing, was that some of my carefully set page breaks had moved.
It took eight weeks of daily work before Bryony was ready for its second send-off. I set it aside for several days and scrolled through it. I found copy errors and straying page breaks. I cracked.
Posted by Denise M. Baran-Unland at 3:00 PM
Wednesday, August 3, 2016
Tuesday, August 2, 2016
Capture the Mood
Yesterday I had lunch with an author friend who also writes and publishes her young adult vampire stories.
She brought along her work-in-progress and asked me to read over a sensuous scene. She was trying to keep the right balance between making the reader feel the moment without being explicit.
She nailed it.
Now in adult novels, authors have more freedom in the specific details. But the basics still hold true.
One mistake we writers sometimes make in writing scenes with any sort of sexual tension is focusing in the physical details. As I told my friend, those details are, overall, fairly consistent, if one really thinks about it.
However, an individual's response, their emotions, their thoughts, as the action escalates (or does not), is what makes the difference. And an implication or hints of graphic can be more impactful than blunt words.
Here's the example I shared with her from Visage:
She brought along her work-in-progress and asked me to read over a sensuous scene. She was trying to keep the right balance between making the reader feel the moment without being explicit.
She nailed it.
Now in adult novels, authors have more freedom in the specific details. But the basics still hold true.
One mistake we writers sometimes make in writing scenes with any sort of sexual tension is focusing in the physical details. As I told my friend, those details are, overall, fairly consistent, if one really thinks about it.
However, an individual's response, their emotions, their thoughts, as the action escalates (or does not), is what makes the difference. And an implication or hints of graphic can be more impactful than blunt words.
Here's the example I shared with her from Visage:
John stayed just
as quiet on the return trip. Tonight, however, he did not pull into the back of
the cafeteria. Instead, he swung the car into the staff parking lot and stopped
at the far end, in front of the tall hedges bordering the empty road.
“I’ll walk you
to the building,” John said. “The car’s staying here overnight.”
“How will you get
home?” Melissa asked in surprise.
“I live across
the street.”
“Then why do
you…?”
“Drive to work?
I don’t always go straight home.”
Melissa’s face
grew hot. She knew that. He went to Shelby, of course. She blindly groped for
the door handle. She had to leave, now, even if only to hide the bitter
disappointment and frustration filling her eyes. She had misjudged John’s intentions again! Why did she keep
torturing herself?
“Melissa, stop.”
He leaned near,
cupped her face with one hand, and gently turned her. Melissa quickly blinked
away tears and melted into John’s warm fingers. Her mind whirled. It’s a dream,
she told herself, expecting to awaken in the next moment. This is just a
twisted Bryony dream. The hazy light from the distant lamp pole illuminated the
frenzy in John’s eyes as they searched hers. Melissa sat rigid, scarcely
breathing, anticipating the impending jangling of her alarm clock.
“It’s strange,”
John said, “but I feel we’ve met in another place, or....
John paused and
inched closer. “....another time.”
Melissa throat
tightened. The stillness of the night roared in her ears. John’s breath grazed
her mouth.
“Does that make
sense to you?”
She nodded, too
astounded for words, petrified she’d pierce the elusive magic. Sleep, sleep,
stay asleep, she silently begged, as John closed his eyes and swept a feathery
stroke across her lips. This can’t be happening, Melissa thought. Oh, God, this is real!
Taking her head
in his hands, John kissed her in earnest this time, gently, then harder and
faster until Melissa released her pent up desire for John and met those kisses
with a fervor that astonished her.
She touched his
face and ran her fingers through that glorious hair, then to his shirt and
down, farther than she had ever touched him, not even in Munsonville, not even
when she was playing Bryony. By the time John opened his eyes and smiled at
her, Melissa knew what she wanted to know.
If John Simotes
had ever been a vampire, he wasn’t one now.
Monday, August 1, 2016
Sick Day
Friday I left work early (early for me).
I hadn't felt well the last couple of days, but didn't actually realize I was sick. Sometimes, I get too busy to pay close attention. Everything seemed hard, and I kept making mistakes. I had a very full Saturday, and I figured a couple of hours in front of Before the Blood before bedtime was just the boost I needed.
However, the most I accomplished was rereading through previously written material as my mind wouldn't stay focused. I tried working out and stopped one exercise shy (no energy). So I showered and settled down to watch two episodes of BoJack Horseman with Daniel. I fell asleep. As I trudged up to bed, I had this realization in my foggy brain: maybe I'm sick.
By morning, it was obvious. I was sick.
So I caneled all my obligations for the day, rested, and fiddled with the novel. I felt somewhat better yesterday and spent a few moments rereading through Saturday's additions. I actually accomplished more than I had thought, so that part felt good. This morning, I'm tired and getting up was difficult, but I'm on the mend.
It's been weeks since I spent a dedicated day in my imagination. I guess even getting sick has its benefits.
And we know that in all things God works for the good of those who love him, who have been called according to his purpose. Romans 8:28
I hadn't felt well the last couple of days, but didn't actually realize I was sick. Sometimes, I get too busy to pay close attention. Everything seemed hard, and I kept making mistakes. I had a very full Saturday, and I figured a couple of hours in front of Before the Blood before bedtime was just the boost I needed.
However, the most I accomplished was rereading through previously written material as my mind wouldn't stay focused. I tried working out and stopped one exercise shy (no energy). So I showered and settled down to watch two episodes of BoJack Horseman with Daniel. I fell asleep. As I trudged up to bed, I had this realization in my foggy brain: maybe I'm sick.
By morning, it was obvious. I was sick.
So I caneled all my obligations for the day, rested, and fiddled with the novel. I felt somewhat better yesterday and spent a few moments rereading through Saturday's additions. I actually accomplished more than I had thought, so that part felt good. This morning, I'm tired and getting up was difficult, but I'm on the mend.
It's been weeks since I spent a dedicated day in my imagination. I guess even getting sick has its benefits.
And we know that in all things God works for the good of those who love him, who have been called according to his purpose. Romans 8:28
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